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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. ‘Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

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Tourist is the best option to meet new
people
 and cultures of different countries. Someone has said,
besides
 class hours, travelling is the most effective way to receive life lessons. Personally, I strongly believe that tourism has a positive effect on relationships between
nations
 and I will explain why in
upcoming
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 paragraph. It is true that the most accurate way for travellers to understand the common background
as well as
 the transition of
culture
 around the world. As we all know
culture
 is an extremely rich and unique category. Different cultures will exhibit differences in their cuisine, rituals and lifestyles.
However
, regardless of
culture
, there are similarities,
therefore
 cultural discoveries along the way will help residents of those
nations
 compare, appropriate the beauty of
culture
 and learn how to contribute to a more livable world.
For example
,
besides
 the internet, when
people
travelling
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 from Western countries to Eastern countries
such
 as China, Japan, Korea including Vietnam, they would know that there is another calendar used by these
nations
 which is a common
culture
 called the Lunar Calendar and spiritual representation
according to
 the year of birth based on 12 legend animals
Furthermore
, If really want to deeply understand the "old stories" of the world, boldly set foot on historical landmarks and explore the historical
culture
 of a certain city from our own perspective. Different dynasties, conflicts and changes will
also
 become much easier and easier to understand through images and exhibits. Often, what
people
 know about history through books is still greatly deviated from reality. The trips are a great opportunity for us to face reality, meet local
people
 and listen to many regional stories from them. Those are probably the living witnesses, the most relevant repositories, or at least, will open a new worldview up to many new perspectives on history.
To conclude
, I must admit that tourism is an indispensable part
in
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 building cohesion among citizens of
nations
, In the long term, it will be
the
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an
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 effective method to unite all
nations
 as one nation in order to solve global challenges.
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