The first chart below gives information about the money spent by british parents on their children sports between 2008 and 2014.The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in britain over the same time period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by british parents on their children sports between 2008 and 2014.The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in britain over the same time period.
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The given charts illustrate the money spent on
sports
expenditures by British parents in pounds and the number of participants in favourable types of
sports
, namely football, athletics and swimming, during the period from 2008 to 2014. At first glance,
it is clear that
there was an upward trend in monthly expenses for children`s
sports
,
whereas
the number of participants in
sports
activities fluctuated throughout the period. In the beginning, the initial value of expenditures was 20 pounds,
afterwards
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index climbed moderately and reached its highest point, around 31 pounds, in 2014. With the money spent on extra curriculum, the proportion of students who signed up for them increased
accordingly
, nearly 11
million
in 2008 and 18
million
in 2014. Football was always in demand,
hence
with children above 7.5
million
, the sport kept almost unmodified until the end of the period. The athletics club remained the same in the first two years, 1
million
, and had a sharp rise by 5 times, 5
million
in 2012,
although
it slightly declined the next years. Meanwhile, the swimming kept rising slightly to plateau under 4
million
at the end
.
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