The majority of people believe that zoos ought to prohibited while others think that zoos must supported . In my opinion , I agree that zoos have positive effects on animals

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The majority of people believe that
zoos
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ought to be prohibited,
while
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others think that they must be supported. In my opinion, I agree that
zoos
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have positive effects on
animals
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and
therefore
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the government should invest their money to build more
zoos
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. A good reason why
zoos
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must have
an
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attention from the government is by investing funds
on
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in
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creating a number of
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animals
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animal
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habitatis
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habitats
, which can make a better environment to produce and prevent
the
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endangering.
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, the government could protect the
animals
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that
suffring
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suffering
from extinction
such
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as
caugh
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caught
them and
save
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them in
a
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extreamly
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extremely
sustain
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place.
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,
by
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increasing the number of
the
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zoos
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it
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might be
benifical
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beneficial
to
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many aspects,
providig
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providing
a lot of jobs and
opportunaties
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opportunities
for example
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.
This
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can
leds
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lead
to an increase
on
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many parts of the country
instead
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of wasting the chance by
abloish
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abolish
those
zoos
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, many
jobes
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jobs
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depend on
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in which
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which
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where
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they can earn a decent
sallery
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salary
or wage.
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,
zoos
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allow scientists to study
animals
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and
thier
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their
behaviour more clearly and much
eassier
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easier
. In
this
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method of
studing
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studying
animals
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might live years longer
that
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than
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they should live.
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, the
professionals
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professional's
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tests will enhance
animals
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health by
give
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them the right medicine. In conclusion, If the
govenments
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governments
government
supported
this
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filed
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field
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of
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animals
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animal
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habitait
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habitat
, it could make a lot of advantages,
such
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as
provide
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jobs, stop decrease the
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animals
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animal's
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number and
let
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letting
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scientists do
a
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apply
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medicals
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medical
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surgeries.
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