The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture gives information about the manufacturing of instant noodles.
Overall
, the process is comprised of 8 steps which
is
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started from
storage
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silo and ended up
to
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labelling and sealing. The first stage is when a flour machine comes to storage silos.
Next,
water and
oil
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and soils go to
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step which is
mixer
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the mixer
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, between
step
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2 and 3 there are rollers.
Then
, materials which are mixed together are on the dough sheets. Afterwards, dough strips are level 4 and the strips go to noodles discs
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in the next
step
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the noodles cook with oil and give
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time to dry. In the following stage, there are so many cups which are included with vegetables and spices.
Finally
, the cups are labelled and sealed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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