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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2 005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2 005.
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illustrate
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 how much money people in Germany, France, Italy and Austria spent on
books
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 from 1995 to 2005.
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, it can be seen that there was an increase in the amount of money spent on
books
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 in all different four countries examined, with Austria witnessing the most dramatic rise in the latter half of the period,
while
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 Germany had
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 highest figure throughout the period. The number of money spent on
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 in Germany started at 80
million
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, after which it experienced a dramatic rise to 90
million
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 in 1999 and reach a peak of over 90
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 in 2005. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for Italy
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 in the range from 50 to 55 from 1995 to 1999, followed by a progressive growth to
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 of 60
million
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 in
final
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the final
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 year. 30
million
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 people spent on
books
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 in Austria in 1995, with a significant rise to 40
million
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 and a final increase sharply to over 70
million
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. The figure for France started at about 55
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 dollars, followed by a subsequent growth to 70
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 dollars in 2001 and
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 at over 70
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 dollars in the final year.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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