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the top priority of bussiness is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#priority #bussiness #money #responsibilities
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 said that the highest
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priority
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bussiness
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business
 is making
money
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, the social
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responsibilities
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 is not
nesserary
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necessary
 for them. The writer
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 agree with the reason and explain it flowing the statement On the
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 hand, making
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 of the important
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 of
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bussiness
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business
 beside that they have
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 is
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prioty
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priority
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incometax
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income tax
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 charity, the percentage of jobless
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and
 more activity.
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 social
responsibilities
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 is very important
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 it is
one
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 of
reason
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which
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increase
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 the income for
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bussiness
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business
.
on
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the
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contrast,
somepeople
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some people
 who do not agree maybe can use
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responsibilities
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 as the reason
make
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the bussiness
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bussiness
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business
 pay
money
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 for charity but that
money
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 do not spend
for
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realy
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really
 poor people. It can
be prevent
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company
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the company
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 from working which
affect
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the
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income. All in all the benefit of
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social
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responsibilities
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 is
one
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 of
most
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 important
thing
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things
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 that the company need pay attention
on
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 because it
con
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can
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 improve the fame and
the
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fortune of that company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top priority
  • making money
  • social responsibilities
  • businesses
  • agree
  • counter argument
  • refutation
  • importance
  • personal opinion
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