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The top priority of businesses is making money , and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#priority #businesses #money #responsibilities
There are people
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 that
businesses
 should prioritize
earn
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earning
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 money first and
do
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not have social
responsibilities
while
 there are people who said that
corporations
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corporations'
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 top priority is social
responsibilities
. I would say that making
profit
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a profit
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 s is the top priority for companies,
this
 essay would argue that they should conduct their
businesses
 in
socially
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a socially
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 responsible manner On the one hand, when there is no need to care about public
responsabilities
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responsibilities
, enterprises can focus more on making money and making more profits, but
on the contrary
, when having social
responsibilities
,
businesses
 will be more trusted,
careds
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cared
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 for and remembered by
customers
. Those companies will
also
 be referred to others by
customers
, thereby reducing advertising costs
On the other hand
, corporations without public
responnsibilities
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responsibilities
 will not receive the trust of
customers
 or worse,
hated
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 and can be boycotted leading to no
customers
 thereby leading to the risk of bankruptcy. With
the
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firms that have social
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responsibilities when
responsibilitieswhen
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responsibilities when
 it comes to focusing on how to both profit from
customers
 and meet standards related to public
responsibilities
, it can be a bit of a hindrance in the implementation of the intended plans In conclusion, enterprises need to be socially responsible when operating.
On the contrary
, we should criticize
businesses
 that operate without public
responsibilities

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profit maximization
  • economic development
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • shareholders
  • moral obligation
  • reputation
  • customer loyalty
  • sustainable business models
  • accountability
  • ethical practices
  • regulations
  • consumer expectations
  • economic sustainability
  • stakeholders
  • social impact
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