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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures provide information about the city of Stokeford as it was in 1930 and its prediction in 2023.
Overall
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, the city will be transformed from a rural farmland
town
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 to a very large residential area. The Farmland in the southern area will be removed and replaced with housing along the main
road
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. The post office in the middle will be kept, but the shops that used to be beside the post office will be transformed into more housing.
In Addition
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 to that, more housing will be added
along with
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 an extended
road
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 On the northeast side of the
,
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town
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 a new
road
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 will be built
along with
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 housing on both sides.
This
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 will be taking over the farmland that used to be there. The primary school in the middle of the
town
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 will be kept. But behind the school, a cluster will be built along the
road
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.
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, the garden in the centre of the
town
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 will be transformed into a retirement home.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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