The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
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five types of degrees offered in Australia in the year 1999. As can be seen clearly from the chart the most noticeable feature is that the skilled vocational
diploma
presented the highest deviation between the genders.
In particular
, the male holders constituted the overwhelming majority(90%)
while
their female counterparts amounted to 10% of the graduates. Regarding the other levels of post-school qualifications, the undergraduate and postgraduate diplomas exhibited an opposite pattern. More specifically, in the former one, almost three-quarters of the graduates were women
whereas
in the latter one, females made up only about a third of the alumni.
On the contrary
, the proportion of males that pursued a postgraduate
diploma
was significantly higher than that of
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undergraduate males, standing at 70% and 30% respectively. The genders were more in agreement regarding the rest of the levels of higher education. A slight difference was noted in the master's degree for women and men, accounting for 40% and 60%
accordingly
while
the bachelor's degree was almost equally obtained by both genders, with an approximate proportion of 50%.
Overall
, post-secondary qualifications were slightly more prevalent among men,
although
women had a significant advantage in the undergraduate
diploma
and the greatest gender gap was observed in the skilled vocational
diploma
.
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