The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.

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The line graph illustrates the per cent of visitors to tourist attractions(

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, Pavilion, Pier and Festivals) in Brighton, England from 1980, through three decades.

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, the maximum per cent of

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was seen in the Pavilion( a little under 50%) in 1995 which made it the most popular tourist spot in Brighton. In 2010, the least number of tourists visited the

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( just below 10%). Ironically, the

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received the second-highest number of visitors ( about 35%) over thirty years.

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, the Pavilion from about 25% in 1980 steadily attained its peak in a decade and a half.

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a decline in

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was seen in the following years, it reached slightly above 30% in 2010. In comparison, visitors to the

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rose rapidly from marginally above 20% in 1980 to its highest in half a decade.

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, a drop in

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was observed which was noted to be the least. The number of tourists celebrating the Festival from the original 30% experienced a smooth decrease in 15 years to about 25% and eventually had 30% in 2010.

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, the Pier from its initial 10% was paid

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by slightly over 20% of people in the third decade.

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The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.

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