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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The provided line chart demonstrates how many foreigners
interest
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are interest
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 in
visit
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visiting
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 mainly three districts in Europe over the years from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, it is
evindent
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evident
 from the line chart that the number of
the
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apply
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visitors
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visitor's
visitors'
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consitiuted
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constituted
 upsurge trend
throughou
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throughout
 the years and
most
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the most
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 popular place is the
coast
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coastal
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area
.
to begin
,
it is clear that
 by 1987 the chart
shown
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shows
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highest
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the highest
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 number accounted for the
coast
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coastal
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area
 at 40
thousands
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thousand
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 and more than the mountains
hwich
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which
 provide just 20
thousands
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thousand
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 individuals and the
lackes
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lakes
 areas
are
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apply
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at merely 10
thousands
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thousand
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.
at the end
 of the period, it is obvious that the
coast
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coastal
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area
registed
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registered
 the
sam
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same
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 pattern and continue
at
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a
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sharp
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a sharp
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 increase and recorded 70
thousands
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thousand
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 visitors by 2007.
While
 the mountains
area
shown
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showed
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 gradual climbing but
also
 recorded
the
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a
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 lower number
at
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in
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 2007 which are well over 30 thousand people.
on the contrary
,
the lakes areas
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the areas of the lake
the areas of the lakes
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 represented considerable peaking
at
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in
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 2002 more than the
coast
 areas but dramatical dropped
at the end
 of the period and
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, area, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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