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Some people think that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use, while others argue that it is cruel to do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, with the evergrowing death rate, because of the new viruses, doctors have to come up with new and improved versions of medical drugs, and
this
 scientific development of advanced vaccines has been taken over by a debate where a group of individuals argue that living creatures should not be harmed for the research,
whereas
, the other group people disagree to
this
 their opinion.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide a conclusion
at the end
. To commence, I would like to
spare
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 some light on the advantages of using animals for testing new medicine before putting it up in the market for the locals to consume.
Firstly
, most of the animals that are used for the experiment are provided with a safe environment and their health is monitored regularly during the research, followed by, various infections caused by mammals and it is necessary to find the root cause of the virus in order to put an end.
For instance
, a study has proven that Covid-19 was a virus initiated by bats and to understand the cure doctors had to perform certain procedures on the family trees of the bats, which resulted in developing a vaccine in less than a year.
However
, like, a coin it has another side of cons.
To begin
, there is the threat of aminal trafficking in the name of scientific studies which harms the biodiversity of the ecosystem.
For example
, a recent newspaper report indicated that around 40,000 birds were found exporting from Northern America to
Newzland
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New Zealand
, leading to the disturbance of the wildlife food cycle. But to stop
this
 wildlife export the
government
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governments
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 of all the countries of the world are working together to implement an Animal Act 1994 which will protect the rights of the animals. In my opinion, it is important for doctors to perform experiments on wildlife to protect the human race,
however
, the officials should be mindful enough to enforce strict laws against people involved in aminal trafficking.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and the writer's opinion. The conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the opinion.
task achievement
Address both views as specified in the prompt. Provide more relevant examples and consider adding more details to support the main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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