The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
demonstrate
changes between 1960 to 2000 at Queen Mary Hospital.
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demonstrates
Overall
, some buildings had been demolished during this
period. Also
, there was
changes in the size of some buildings. Only a Change the verb form
were
car
park
and hospital stayed the same place from beginning to end.
In 1960 , there were 4 different buildings ,shopping
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a shopping
center
, Change the spelling
centre
hospital
, farmland and Correct article usage
a hospital
the
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a
car
park
. The hospital was built near the main road and shopping centre
, also
it was in front of car
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the car
park
. In
addition
there was farmland which was behind of shopping Add a comma
,addition
centre
.
In 1980 ,some things Change the verb form
have
has
changed. Unnecessary verb
apply
For instance
,shopping
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the shopping
a shopping
centre
was demolished and exchanged to
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for
cancer
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the cancer
a cancer
centre
, whereas
, farmland
turn into to nursing school. Correct article usage
the farmland
Furthemore
,the hospital was extended and united with Correct your spelling
Furthermore
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
while
the car
park
stayed at the same size.
After 20 years ,the main hospital remained unchanged but cancer
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the cancer
centre
had the most significant extending
and consisted Replace the word
extension
approximately
just over Change preposition
of approximately
one third
,once in three of the place. Add a hyphen
one-third
Meanwhile
the Add a comma
,Meanwhile
car
park
and nursing school became two times smaller than was
.Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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