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The map shows cnanges that Island experienced after the constructions of tourist facilities.

The map shows cnanges that Island experienced after the constructions of tourist facilities.
The map shows
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the cnanges
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cnanges
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changes
 that
Island
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 experienced after the
constructions
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construction
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 of tourist facilities.
Human
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Humans
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 even came to
this
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 isolated from people eyes
place
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 and start to make a mess like always to just make money.
Although
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 firsable or first of all the
island
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 was wide and non touched
place
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 and after the
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construction
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constructions
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,constructions
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 many of
total
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the total
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 territories was built into
a
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apply
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resting
place
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. In the north and the
center
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centre
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 of
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Island
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the Island
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 took
place
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 the accommodation where has a footpath road which ведет к beach.Has a
restaurent
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restaurant
in
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on
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 the west of the
Island
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 and near to them located a reception where from we can go
the
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to the
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 pier by a vehicle track
.
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?
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Fortunatly
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Fortunately
 in comparison with the first map trees, beaches
were'nt
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weren't
 cut down and fauna was saved.
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Also
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,Also
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a
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apply
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south to the
consructions
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constructions
construction
did'nt
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didn't
 experienced any changes.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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