The diagrams show the changes which took place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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1960 to 2000, every twenty years the Queen Mary Hospital changed in layout,

new

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and new

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facilities were added or removed. In 1960, the place had only 4 structures beside the main road. Downside the road there was

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centre with

hospital

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the hospital

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, even lower down, there was

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farmlad

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farmland

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car

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park

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next 40 years the place

wisnessed

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witnessed

a number of dramatic changes. In 1980, the shopping

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was divided into two different places,

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up cancer centre and

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belonging to the hospital. Farmland was remodeled into

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a nursing

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school.

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Car

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park

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did not

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received

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any changes.

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, in 2000,

cancer

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centre obtained

nursing

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school area, but

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car

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the car

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park

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also

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was

splited

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another

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two

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new

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a new

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area

taked

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take

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nursing school which shares a plot with a

car

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park

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the hospital

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hospital

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hospitals

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with

pharmacy

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pharmacies

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nothing has really changed.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

159 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

renovation
expansion
modernization
facilities
departments
adjacent structures
patient care
medical technology
specialized centers
eco-friendly initiatives
initial layout
construction
extensions
improvements
community health services
capabilities
repurposing
developments
efficiency
upgrades

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The diagrams show the changes which took place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging the products they sell. Others say that consumers should avoid buying products which have a lof of packaging. Discuss both views

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