Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
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medical advancements,
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are now individually responsible for their own healthy lifestyles. So,
people
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can live longer and thanks to the gym, It is a place where workers can exercise to live a healthier life. Other opines that the government should take care of it. In
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essay, I will discuss both views and at ,
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conclusion would be made. To scrutinize , everybody should be responsible for their bodies. Citizens should stay away from fast foods and
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, eat lots of fruits and vegetables if they want to live a longer life. To live more years, citizens
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have to focus on outdoor activities
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as volleyball, Basketball and many more.
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, when someone goes to buy some groceries nearby, at that time the person has to go there on walking
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of going with their private transportation.
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, a survey conducted by the World Health Organization, states that more than 60% of the population of the world are more healthy and often exercise themselves, in comparison to
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who depend on others.
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, some advisers think that the government should include themselves, in order to raise awareness amongst their populace to stay healthy and fit. But there are some circumstances in which the audience cannot understand about living healthy lifestyles.
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,
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the Covid-19 pandemic
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there was fear all over the country
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that
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pandemic
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crowd do not know about the virus which spread whole over the world, and in that, circumstances
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do not know what to do
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order to keep themselves fully fit, so they do not get affected by the virus.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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