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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The maps compare the current layout of the sports centre of a university and how it will change after refurbishment. 
It is clear that
 there will be various striking transformations with the development of the leisure pool
together with
 the sports hall in the outdoor course area and some other facilities
such
 as shops, café and dancing studios. As can be seen, one particular change is that two outdoor courses currently lying on either side of the main centre will later be replaced by a new pool on the left and a hall on the right. In the middle, the 25-metre pool, reception desk
as well as
 the changing room and seating will remain unchanged, except for the gym which is intended to be extended to the eastern side. Another modernization planned to be carried out is that the number of changing rooms will increase to meet students' needs. One of which will be in the southwest and the other will be located in the southeast.
Moreover
, a sports store and a coffee shop are
also
 presented in the future plan as they will stand on the left and right sides of the entrance respectively.
Finally
, 2 dancing studios are going to be built in the east of the centre.
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