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many people prefer to watch foreign movies rather than locally produced films. why could this be? should governments give more financial support to local film industries

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Based on statistics
people
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been
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tended to watch universal films in comparison
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 they live. Realistically, a wide variety category and most popular creator, it seems obvious. But the idea of having better
movies
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degree
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to
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 consideration by states might be possible.
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, there are some reasons why international
movies
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 are more attractive than local films. First and foremost, they belong to entirely professional companies,
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 as Netflix or Sony.
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, the best directors who are able to absorb the best
screen plays
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 or
actress
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actresses
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in
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across the world have been accompanying
with
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them.
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, after watching those kinds of
movie
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movies
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 folk expectancies are going to
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 towards local
movies
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. To illustrate it, after watching Avatar which belongs to
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one of the most famous
company
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companies
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movies
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 seekers unconsciously compare the features with
itself
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its
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movies
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.
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, curiosity might be another reason regardless of how a film is perfectly created.
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,
people
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 find details of other cultures full of experiences. like what they ponder, how interact, or even associated foods and clothes. In my sight, there is a strong connection between how much countries consider budget and how their
movies
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 are becoming well-known.
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, the measure of that might not be as much as international
movies
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in particular
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 those
are
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related
Hollywood
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to Hollywood
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.
Fore
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For
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about
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 the Eli” is a film that
generally
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 admitted in my area, in fact, not only locally but
also
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 globally. Irrefutably, the pillar of
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 achievement is
up to
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the amount of investment.
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,
movies
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 have the incredible capacity to gather attention in the case of tourism too.
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, found could turn back by buying film and even attempting to travel as well.
According to
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 evidence, so many
people
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 have
traveled
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 to see closely popular houses in
movies
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 like the friend’s coffee shop.
To sum up
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,
spectaculars
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 excitement for international
movies
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 is deniable. But, beyond any
doubt
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 high-quality productions are capable of convincing
people
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 of whatever they want to trace.
Which depends
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 on
number
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a number
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 of financial supports the result will
be improve
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.
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