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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#plans #show #layout #university’s #sports #centre #redevelopment #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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 the changes
of
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University
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the University
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 sports centre over a period
form
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from
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 present to future plans.
Overall
, it can be seen from the diagram that the present and future plans
witnesses
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 a significant modernization. Most noticeable , the increases
is
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 leisure pool and sports hall, the
transformance
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transformants
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 of the facilities. Looking
maps
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 in more detail , we can see that the present ,
the
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outdoor courts
is
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in the the west destroyed to
made
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 way for the development
the
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 leisure pool in the future plans . The main development is that the outdoor courts
is
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 in the east destroyed down
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transformed into
the
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 sports hall and dance studio. the gym was expanded and
bigs
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.
As well as
 the layouts mentioned that have been added are Changing room and Sport shop
is
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in the
South west
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Southwest
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.The other physical structures that have been added are Changing room and Cafe
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in the south East .
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