The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write about 150 words

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write about 150 words
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The diagram shows the way in which soft cheese is produced, starting from water and milk.
Overall
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, the process has 5 steps, starting with only 2 ingredients, milk and water ,and finishing with soft cheese and Wastewater.
Firstly
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, H2o and milk are mixed and
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cooled at 5 degrees Celsius for two hours.
Secondly
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, salt is added to the mix and the whole recipe is put for Fermentation for 120 minutes at a high temperature of 55 degrees.
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, in
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process, the liquid is transformed multiple times into a thick liquid.
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, the fermented mixture is heated at 100 grades Celsius for 8 hours, which is the longest step of the whole technique .Nextly, a part of the bend is steamed and another part is evaporated.
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, after all the steps, the composition is cooled for 8 hours at the same temperature as in the beginning ,5 grades, and
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is filtered through a filter until the final result came out, the Soft Cheese. The Wastewater is eliminated.
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