The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph given compares the percentage of
population
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the population
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living in cities in four South East Asian
countries
namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
, and
Indonesia
(from 1970-2020), with future
forecast
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forecasts
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from 2030 to 2040.
Overall
, all
countries
have sharply
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from the entire period even in the predicted computation
on
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the
year
2040.
While
Malaysia
has the largest urban
population
increase
with the rest of the
reamning
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remaining
countries
, a similar trend is observed with
indonesia
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Indonesia
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with a
continous
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continuous
prediction
on
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the end of the given period,
however
, in terms of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Thailand
, fluctuations are noticed before it reached its peak on the final
year
. On the one hand,
Malaysia
and the
Philippines
started
a bout
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about
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30
percent
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of
indiviual
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individuals
individual
living in cities,
however
in 1990, both
countries
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a little over
increment
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an increment
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of 40
percent
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,
while
Malaysia
started to have its remarkable
increase
where it will
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peak
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at roughly 86%,
conversely
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the
Philippines
have a decline from 2000-2010 before it will have a 50% additional people in the cities.
On the other hand
,
Thailand
and
Indonesia
started a low percentile of city
population
at below 20%, despite
of
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the foreseen
four fold
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increase
in the number of
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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that will occupy city
center
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in
Indonesia
where it overtakes
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in the
year
2000 at an
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percentage of 26%.
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Moreover
,
Thailand
is expected to bolster
population
numbers in the
year
2040 with a 10% additional people from 2020 where it stalled at 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, increase, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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