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In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can the arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

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 the world has seen
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considerable growth
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 science and
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 still holds a certain importance in the cultural and spiritual
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 of people because of the benefits which humans have received from
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 as musicians, painters and writers not from scientists. In my opinion, there are many valuable things that almost all people can study based on these arts. Admittedly, nowadays, humans have many kinds of entertainment activities which help the spiritual enhancement of
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. These activities are not indispensable for balancing
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 and work. It is because of its benefits that it is easy to find short-term
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 classes widely held in many centres as a method of relaxation, emotional expression and creativity.
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 seem to ignore them.
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human value through their work that no
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 can be transmitted. Take a writer for an example, they have strong power to spread meaningful stories and positive energy to communities that can contribute, maintain and develop the good culture and tradition of each nation.
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, In medicine, doctors used music as a tool to ease the pain of the treatment regimens, especially for patients who meet mental problems.
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 not only brings many benefits but
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 reduces recovery time.  In conclusion, science and
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 bring much knowledge about modern things but
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 helps people deeply understand and know what they want to be.
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, both of them should be maintained and developed equally to ensure no loss of traditional and cultural
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 of the nation.
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