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The graph shows the amount of money spent books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005

The graph shows the amount of money spent books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005
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The line graph demonstrates the budget for
books
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 in 3 different countries: Germany, France, Italy and Austria
form1995
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 to 2005. Units are presented in millions of US dollars.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Germany has the highest
money
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 spent on
books
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 at nearly 96
million
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 in 2005 and Italy was the lowest in spending
money
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 on
books
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 at around 53
million
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.
To begin
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, Germany’s spending
money
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 started with the highest spend
money
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 in other countries at 80
million
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 before increasing to 90
million
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 in 1999. After that, it declined to approximately 85
million
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 in 2003 before it reach a peak of spending
money
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 on
books
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 at about 95
million
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 in 2005. Turning to Italy, its spending began in 1995 at about 50
million
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 before it experienced a rise to about 55
million
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.
This
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 climbed gradually to around 75
million
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at the end
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 of the recorded period. Meanwhile, France spent nearly 55
million
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 on
books
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 in 1995.
This
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 spending
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 jumped to around 70
million
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 in 2001 before rising to
75million
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75 million
 in 2005.
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, Austria’s spending was 30
million
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 in 1995, but it
then
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 rose gradually to 40
million
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 in 1999 and
then
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 it remain unchanged in 2001. After that, it
rockerted
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rocketed
 to just over 70
million
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 in 2005, surpassing Italy’s spending in the period year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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