The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany , France , Italy and Australia between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany , France , Italy and Australia between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph below
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us information about the profit
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spend on books in four
country
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were, Germany ,France, Italy and Australia from 1995 to 2005.
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it can be seen that Germany has the highest US dollars
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four
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capital.
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contrast
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Australia
also
has the lowest
money
that
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on books . What is more the graph
give
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us information about two
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are
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France and Italy
also
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in several
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. Beginning with the highest
money
that Germany
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.It started at 80% in 1995
then
it slightly increased to nearly 90% before it reach a peak at around 95% in 2005.After that was Australia with the worst income profit that begin
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30%
then
it have climb up to 71% from 1995 to 2005, which has go over Italy
at
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2005. Turning to the remaining statistic , France was the second capital has high
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books , which begin at 55% in 1995 and slightly go up to 70% in 2001 before it ending the
peroid
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period
at nearly 75% in 2005 .At
last
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was
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Italy
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good
money
spent at 50% in 1995, but after
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a
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decreased
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50% in 1999 . After
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it
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slightly increased to nearly 61% in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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