The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Asutralia between 1995 and 2005

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Asutralia between 1995 and 2005
The line graph shows the sum of pay of Us dollars in
millions
of
of
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4 countries spent on
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the book
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book
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books
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between 1995 and 2005 period.
Overall
, an upward tendency can be seen in the figure
of
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property
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the property
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of
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4 countries.
However
Germany spent property on
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book
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books
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had
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and had
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the highest mark and
Austria
had the lowest mark in
first
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year.
To begin
, the amount of
of
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Germany started at 80
million
and increased slightly to 90
million
in 1999.
Then
, there was a slight decline from 90 to 85
million
before increasing to nearly 95
million
in 2005. Turning to
Austria
, there was a slight increase in the amount of property that
Austria
spent on books from 30
millions
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to 40
millions
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in
first
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three
years
before staying stable
in
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two
years
after.
Finally
,
this
number increased dramatically to just above 70
millions
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million
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in 2001. Compare with
four
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countries, Germany had the highest point in the end and the finish point of
Austria
between France
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and
Italy. Meanwhile, the number of money France spent
of
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book
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books
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increased steadily to 75
million
in six
years
period. About Italy, the statistic
of
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money spent on
book
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books
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in Italy started at 50
million
and fluctuated in
first
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the first
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three
years
before increasing steadily from 50
millions
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million
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to nearly 62
million
in
last
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the last
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4
years
.
However
, the
last
point of France was higher than Italy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, book, austria, million, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuations
  • trends
  • spike
  • decline
  • steady
  • anomaly
  • cultural influences
  • technological advancements
  • e-books
  • internet penetration
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • recession
  • literary
  • socio-economic factors
  • statistical data
  • graph analysis
  • comparative analysis
  • book fair
  • percentage change
  • peak
  • trough
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