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Over population in the country is a serious issue that has given rise to numerous problems. Elaborate on one or two serious issues and give a plausible solution for them that governments can implement.

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Generally
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people
 say that
population
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the population
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 has been increasing
day
 by
day
 and it would be very precarious for
country
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the country
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.
Above
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The above
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population
 in the
country
 is a dangerous problem that has given rise to plenty
problems
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of problems
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.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate
major
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on major
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 problems and possible
solution
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solutions
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. To get the ball rolling,
population
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the population
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 is increasing
day
 by
day
 and it would be very hazardous for
country
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the country
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 because
with
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apply
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over
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overpopulation
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population
 unemployment rate has
also
 been increasing. Owing to
this
,
people
 do not get gob and without
job
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a job
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 surviving
the
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apply
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life is very difficult.
People
 have their
family
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families
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 and they have to earn money for their
family
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families
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 and without
job
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a job
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 it is impossible to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their family’s needs.
Furthermore
,
inflation
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the inflation
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 rate has
been
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skyrocketed because of
over
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overpopulation
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population
 and
increment
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an increment
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 is witnessed in all products.
Therefore
,
bunch
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a bunch
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 of personages believe that living life in
this
 modern era is very difficult because of
increasing
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the increasing
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population
. In
this
 contemporary era, traffics on the street and accidents on the roads are increasing and
people
 are facing many types of difficulties during
traveling
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travelling
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 time. On the paradoxical side, governments should start
seminar
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seminars
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 on awareness of
over
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overpopulation
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population
. In doing so,
people
 can get information about how
over
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overpopulation
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population
 is affected in our lives. Government should implement
population
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a population
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 growth control policy. In which parents can give birth
only
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to only
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 one or two
child
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children
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. Owing to
this
,
population
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the population
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 would
be
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decrease
day
 by
day
 and it would be very fruitful for
country
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the country
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 and for
country’s
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the country’s
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people
. Stating the compendium,
although
, governments are implementing new rules
day
 by
day
,
people
 failed to follow rules. The above monograph has propounded major problems and how we can tackle
this problem
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these problems
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 very effectively.
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