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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.
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The bar chart reveals information about the rate of world
illiteracy
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 estimation by gender and region amongst six different nations.
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, the higher proportions of
women
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 in all categories than computed
men
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.
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, South Asia, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa had the lowest rates of
illiteracy
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 for both genders. It is clear from the graph that, the illiterates in the developed countries had the lowest trend amongst all six regions, and it was only around 1 to 3 per cent. Meanwhile,
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 trend in Latin America and Caribbean regions was approximately 10%for both groups. The lack of education in Asia ,followed by the Arab States and Africa for
women
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 was much less than that of
men
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.In ,Africa nearly 49% of
women
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 did not study in formal school and
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 percentage was 30% for
men
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.
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, South Asia accounted for the most
illiteracy
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 rate in 2000 for
women
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 and
men
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 it was just above 55% and 33% ,respectively.
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 in the Arab ,States the education gap between both genders was
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 high, with almost 29%
men
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's
illiteracy
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 rate in comparison with 53 % of
women
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.

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