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Some people feel that animals should have the same rights as humans, but others think they are not as equal or intelligent as us so should not have the same rights. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

#people #animals #rights #humans
The given chart shows the frequency of
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 citizens that preferred to eat in
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 from 2003 to 2013.
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 number of people went to
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 either once or twice a month in 2013.
Whereas
, the lowest was recorded for those that would go daily in 2006
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 in 2013.
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, we see that almost 30% of the people were witnessed going to fast food
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 once a week for the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.
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 in the same year those who went once or twice a month showed a similar pattern,
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 a slight decrease was observed in the year 2006 i.e., 25%.
On the other hand
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 basis or those who showed no interest at all in visiting the
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 for the year 2003 till 2013 was less than 5% and recorded lowest among all others.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethical treatment
  • Cognitive functions
  • Hierarchy of rights
  • Ecosystems
  • Legislation
  • Species-specific
  • Sentience
  • Consciousness
  • Compassion
  • Cruelty
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