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Some people believe that the government should not support arts and other activities. However, others believe that the arts and other activities should be funded. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #support #arts #activities
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really
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a really
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 necessary thing, that activity went into our life. Now is difficult
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imagine
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a
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life without
Internet
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. And today
is become
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 conventional
use
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Internet
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the Internet
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different
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a different
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question
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. I
use
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the Internet
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 very often too. In
foreseeable
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past
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learn
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new
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a new
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profession
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professions
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Internet
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. When I finished
a
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University, I wanted to teach new knowledge for Programming. I started
search
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searching
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 some information, books,
videos
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and videos
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 which could help me
for
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with
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 my studying.
Then
 I got
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a knowledge’s
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knowledge’s
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 base and took
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the course
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course
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courses
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 for
advancement
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 information that I know. All these steps would
were
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be
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 harrowing
hard
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and hard
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 and some of them
maybe
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may be
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 impossible
,
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 if I don’t
had
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. Now I
use
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 for
a
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work,
for
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to
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 answer my question, for watching films, reading books and having
conversation
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conversations
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 with my friends. In my
job
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,job
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new
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a new
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 web insurance system, and I
use
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the Internet
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 for it
and
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when I have a bizarre and difficult question. At
home
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 I watch films and serials
in
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on
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Internet
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an Internet
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 streaming platform.
Also
, I find new words, rules and books, that help me
learning
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Internet
using
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 is
very
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a very
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 controversial process.
At first
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 side –
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the Internet
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 very dazzling thing,
who
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that
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 help us in other different business. But at
second
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 side –
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have
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has
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 many
disjoined
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disjointed
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, strange,
an
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and
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 horrible information, that can hurt us. That’s
way
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why
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 we should be
carefully
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careful
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 and attentive when we are using
Internet
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the Internet
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