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Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #crimes #parents
Parenting is the most responsible duty. Some folks think ,
when
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that
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 children
commit
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who commit
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 crimes should be punished .
However
 , others argued that punished their parents
instead
 of
a
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child
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children
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.
Therefore
 , I will discuss both points of view and give my opinion in the ensuing paragraph.
To begin
 with, nowadays, the crime rate
have
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 been increased which
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is commited
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commited
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committed
 by youngsters . The
reason
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reasons
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 behind
this
 situation are lack of education and poverty . Parent plays a vital role . In childhood , children learn mostly
by
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from
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 their mother and father. In
this
 situation, they can see and learn bad habits and they commit crimes. If ,
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the teenager
a teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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 should be punished
that
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the
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 next time they think
to repeat
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of repeating
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 it .
Moreover
 , it is important for
teenagar
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teenagers
teenager
 to understand the laws and rules so that they will feel more
discourage
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discouraged
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 to commit crimes again after release.
On the other hand
 , some people think that parents should be punished rather than
child
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the child
a child
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 . These days, people are busy to earn money. So, they did not have time to teach their kids to good or bad habits .
Sometime
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the
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children never know it is a wrong thing because they
watched
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watch
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it in
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in
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on
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 television or
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
For example
, the boy hit the girl because he saw television or
internet
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the internet
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 . He
never
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had never
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 known before
this
 is the wrong thing. In conclusion , I believe that who
have
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has
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 to be punished depends on the
situations
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situation
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. If
the
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apply
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youngster knows
about
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that
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 these is wrong thing and still do
it
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them
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so
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apply
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they need to get punished.
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coherence cohesion
The essay has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence. The introduction and conclusion are unclear and the main points are not well-supported.
task achievement
The essay attempts to address both views, but the arguments are not developed clearly. There are several irrelevant points and the examples are not well-explained.
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