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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph given presents
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data
 about how
average
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prices
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 of
copper
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, nickel and zinc changed in 2014. From the overview,
prices
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 of these three metals all hit their bottom in June. The
prices
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 remained at
same
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 level during the period from July to September. Changes in
prices
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 of
copper
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 and zinc were
similer
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similar
 throughout the whole year.
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 with, we can see a dramatic decrease in
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nickel
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price
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 in the first six months of 2014, from 6% in January to -3% in June. In July, its
price
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 went up by -1%, but
then
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 it did not change until September.
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Price's
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 change of nickel increased by 1% in the
last
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 month of 2014. In January,
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price
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the price
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 of
copper
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 raised by 2%;
however
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, it dropped
stablely
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stable
 until June. In December,
copper
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's
price
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 went up by roughly 1.5%, which was very close to its initial number. As for zinc, the
price
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 soared by 3% in February, but it went down significantly for the next four months.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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