An increasing number of people do not know their neighbors, and there is no longer a sense of community. What are the reasons for this? How to solve it?

Number of
people
who less socializing and do not know their nearest
resident
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has grown over the past few years due
the
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increasing of technology and social
media
user.
People
are prefer
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to talk using a
chatting
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application or by reaching their friends on social
media
. Social
media
and chatting
application
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applications
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are the modern technologies that help many
people
in
this
era. Some
of
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individuals can reach others that
unreachable
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by
walk
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walking
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or car. Even
tough
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though
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there is a distance
more
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of more
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than a hundred
kilometers
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, chatting
application
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applications
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such
as Whatsapp, make us feel close because they have a video call feature. Using
this
feature,
people
can keep in touch
each
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other.
On the other hand
, when some
people
busy
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to reach out their far
relation
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relations
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.
People
don't realize to say hello
with
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the nearest
people
around them,
for
instance
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their
neighbors
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. Spend much time
to
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scrolling social
media
to talk with many
people
in cyberspace, make some individuals feel enough to communicate with others. Some
people
think their online friends are enough for them to
fullfill
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fulfil
their social life. It will give an impact that some
people
think they don't need
a new friends
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in their real life. But, it will be different when the
community
in their environment can build
a
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good communication around their house.
For instance
, in some
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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in Indonesia
such
as Yogyakarta. We can meet that many
neighbors
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neighbours
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are cohesive and get along together.
This
could
happened
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because the
community
in every area, and the leader of the
community
can organize many plans like
competition
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in
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on
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Indonesia Independence Day, meeting every week in one of
member
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the member
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house, and
help
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helping
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each
others
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other
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while
one of their
member
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members
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have
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has
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a wedding or cemetery. Those solutions really help
people
to know
more
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apply
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each other, and feel they need their
neighbors
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neighbours
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to live comfortably. In conclusion, the
community
and the leader of the
community
must encourage their member to
active
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in some of
activities
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the activities
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that their make. They
also
need to ask
to
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for
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suggestion
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suggestions
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for making the
community
life better.
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