An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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field has developed with

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technology and it has various kinds of operations to save

people

's lives.

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, there are some

surgeries

to convert physical

apperance

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appearance

according to

individuals' wishes.

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surgeries

are good because it helps to change

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abnormal features. Changing external features without any concern is not

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trend. Nowadays,

people

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people

prefer to change their outlook

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fashion and a few of them change

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look as a habit. They like to take

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others

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attention and

therefore

they do

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time to time.

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well-known person and

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also

changed his physical

apperance

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appearance

due to

his

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personal reasons.

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plastic

surgeries

have become famous

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these days and a lot of

people

like to

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change

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appearance

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past

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decades.

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plastic

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because it helps to improve the personality and confidence of

people

. They will attract the community if they are famous individuals.

However

plastic

surgeries

are salient to transfer

people

's external features who had severe burns.

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Similarly

. there are some disadvantages of

plastic

operations for

people

who do them without any considerable reason because it impacts to

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body. They need to inject anaesthesia before the surgery. Every

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have some kinds of risks for the lives.

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this

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aspect of

plastic

surgeries

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surgery

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To conclude

plastic

surgeries

are

imperical

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empirical

for the community because it helps to enhance the quality of

lives

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life

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people

suppose to do these operations as

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. It is better

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if these

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because it has a risk

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life as well.

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Idealized beauty standards
Cosmetic surgery
Advancements in medical technology
Socially acceptable
Self-improvement
Psychological well-being
Competitive workforce
Youthful appearance
Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
Physical appearance

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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties having enough sleep what are problems caused by lack of sleep? what can be done about this lack of sleep?

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