The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The Pie Chart and the Table are representing information about
tourists
in a certain holiday resort in Australia. They are shown several points such
as tourist origin place, average length of stay, most popular accommodation and their main activity during vacation.
Overall
, Asia was the region which had the most visitors
to come to
Australia Change preposition
apply
while
the smallest number of people to visit this
place was Other which may consist of various places around the globe.
To begin
with, European tourists
spent the longest stay with approximately 16 days, followed by American Tourists
with 14 days, then
Tourists
from other countries and Asia respectively with 10 and 7 days. Next,
the favourite accommodation in Australia for European visitors
and from other regions was either Camping or Caravan whilst Asian Tourists
choose a
fancier Correct article usage
apply
places
to stay Correct the article-noun agreement
place
such
as a 5-star hotel, meanwhile
American guests prefer a 4-star hotel. Add a comma
,meanwhile
Lastly
, Asian and American visitors
most likely spent their vacation by doing sightseeing, while
European people are more likely to choose Swimming or Sunbathing, while
visitors
from outside those regions prefer to go Surfing.Submitted by raymondgandi on
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