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the chart shows projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060

the chart shows projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060
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The two pie charts show how the
production
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 of six different sectors could develop in 2040 and 2060. The six sectors presented are
Services
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, Energy, Manufacturing, Agriculture, Materials and
Info-Com
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Tech
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.
Overall
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, it can be argued that the sector of
Services
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 will be the main important one followed by Manufacturing and
Info-Com
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Tech
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,
while
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 the other three will be only a little part of the entire World
production
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. Focusing on details,
Services
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,
Info-Com
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Tech
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 and Materials will grow by 1% from 2040 to 2060. The sector of
Services
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 will increase from 40% of the global
production
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 to 41%,
Info-Com
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Tech
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 from 15% to 16% and Materials from 3% to 4%.
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, Manufacturing will grow by 2% from 2040 to 2060 passing from 31% of the global
production
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 to 33%. On the other ,hand the sectors of agriculture and energy will decrease their
production
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 respectively by 3% and 2%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, services, info-com, tech with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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