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The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S.

The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S.
#information #species
The pie chart
illustrate
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 what kind of animal
used
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 for testing in the United States.
Overall
,
while
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 the figures rabbits
most
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 popular for scientists, on the other ,hand sheep
out
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 of
favor
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 for
scientits
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scientists
.most unpopular for
testings
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testing
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.
It is clear that
largest
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 proportion
tipe
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type
tipi
 of
testings
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 for scientists
are
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sheeps
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sheep
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 (38%). By applying contrast hamsters are the second kind of
annimals
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animals
 the are accounting
27.7
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%. In ,addition virtually primates are unpopular for
testings
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testing
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 it took 9% of the pie chart. Just near
of
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the percentage the pigs it
tooks
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took
 9.3% and more
prefer
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then
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than
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 pigs are the dogs it higher
of
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the percentage of 1.1%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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