Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affectedthe types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays
technology
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is doing everything
instead
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of
people
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. And, most
of
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people
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the people
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right now
writing
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massages
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messages
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with each
others
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other
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using cellphones
such
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as
,
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facebook
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,
snapchat
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and
instagram
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Instagram
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.
However
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, social media now can do problems between
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people
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. I would like to discuss it
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the following paragraphs.  
Firstly
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,
this
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generation is not the same as before.
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, Sara posts a picture to tempt her
friends
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to let them be angry, or
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a video that she met a famous player. And,
this
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had
became
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a negative condition.
Moreover
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, some
people
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create a love story between two of them on
the
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social media without meeting in real life. Often,
people
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believe each other but one of them maybe will be a stranger to find a way to steal her or his information to start tracking her or him in real life.  
Secondly
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, in the
past
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we have to
visits
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each
others
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other
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every Friday and Saturday but now we send each
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other
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massages
instead
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.
This
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makes
a weak relationships
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also
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.
Furthermore
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, some of the jobs
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by
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online, so they stay at home without having
friends
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.
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, we must live the same as past and just imagine that
the
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technology
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disappeared so we wouldn't lose
friends
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or
relationship
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relationships
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.     In conclusion,
technology
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with its modern characteristics is creating an illusion to connect
people
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nevertheless
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it is actually impacting
people
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's lives adversely. And we can try our best to don't let
the
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technology
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cover our
relationship
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relationships
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,
friends
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, family, and the
important
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importantly
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thing our
trusts
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trust
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