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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day.

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The two maps demonstrate a health centre before and after the construction of a number of facilities from 2005 to the present day. As can be seen from the pictures, the health centre has experienced a substantial transformation in both outdoor and interior rooms over the given period.
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, the only zone which has remained unchanged was the Physiotherapy room since 2005. First of all, the Minor operations
area
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 has been constructed on the left-hand side of the Physiotherapy zone.
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, the consulting rooms have changed both dimensions and the number increased to four compared to that in 2005 which had only 3 rooms.
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, the office has been made smaller to make way for the Reception
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. Another notable transformation is that the Entrance has relocated to the southwest of the building.
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 led to a large waiting
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, which has been expanded with more seats for residents. The Reception desk is now placed in front of the office and a children’s play
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 has been added in the corner opposite the entrance.
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, a number of changes
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 took place outside. Car parking has been expanded to double slots in the present day in comparison with only 12 slots in the year 2005.
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, the size of the garden has been decreased to make way for Car parking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health centre
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • layout
  • consultation rooms
  • treatment rooms
  • pharmacy
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • disabled access
  • technological advancements
  • preventive care
  • rehabilitation services
  • administrative offices
  • community needs
  • public health policy
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • entrance area
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