The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The two supplied pie charts outline the trend of results of a survey which sampled a
cross section
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of 100 people from 1994 to 1998. And the destinations of visits abroad by UK residents to
western
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Western
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Europe, North America, and other areas.
However
, there are four reasons for visiting abroad which are, Holiday, Business, visits
friends
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to friends
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or relatives, and other reasons.     The total
visits
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number of visits
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abroad by
the
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apply
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UK Residents in 1994 is 22,072. Approximately 18,000 residents went to Western Europe, that’s a very large proportion, and the 4,072
resident’s
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residents
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half of them went to North America, another half went to other areas. In
year
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1995, the total abroad
travelers
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travellers
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are 21,610, which is the lowest of
travelers
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travellers
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out of the country
while
,
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the highest
total
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number of total
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abroad is 28,828 in 1998.
In addition
, most
travelers
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travellers
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travel for holidays, and
a
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very small proportion
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of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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travel for other reasons.  
Overall
, Western Europe hosted most of the
travelers
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travellers
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from the UK in all years 1994 to 1998 with almost 85% of
total
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the total
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people.
Instead
, North America and other areas hosted the
last
15% of People.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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