Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the present time,
individuals
around the world take the view that routine is preferable to any changes
. In contrast
, others believe that change
has a beneficial role in our lives. The objective of this
essay is to discuss both of this
and give my own perspective with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
Correct pronoun usage
these
To embark
with, many people avoid Verb problem
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changes
because they might like being stable without unnecessary changes
. For instance
, people who want to spend their lives pursuing a single career path without any promotions. Moreover
, one of the reasons why individuals
tend to do this
due
to their fear and not being willing to take a risk. Add a missing verb
is due
Such
risks as losing a job or hatred from colleagues. This
is the most habitual for the Japanese population. Their cultural beliefs and traditions do not allow such
behaviour where workers ask for a promotion. It is thought to be rude by the Japanese society.
On the other hand
, others advocate that changes
are important and always have positive effects on a person and his surroundings. In other words
, without change
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change,
individuals
can not reach their pinnacle and aim. Also
, it was proven by scientists that a person who tends to change
has more changes
to stay mentally health. Correct your spelling
chances
That is
because when people expand their knowledge and learn about new activities which are unusual for them, the brain activates neurons to cope with difficulties. Therefore
, these actions are connected with human change
by implication. As a result
, change
has a positive impact on individuals
' development and mental health.
To sum up
, there are two opinions, those who appreciate change
and those who do not. Change
has an important function in developing the brain and personality. However
, some societies do not prefer change
due to
their culture and tradition. From my own perspective, change
matters, and being flexible is much more important nowadays than ever.Submitted by shansharova.assel on
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