The chart below compares the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

The chart below compares the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001.
The given bar chart provides information about the comparison between the accumulation of British citizens who lived together in a house in 1981 and 2001. It can be seen from the graph that there are differences in people's preferences for who stayed close together, and 2-person in the household are the most popular in both given time periods. Regarding
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1981, 2-person was the most popular Britannia’s people lived jointly at 31, followed by 3-person at 20.
Furthermore
, 4-person and 1-person were at 10s,
while
5-person and 6-person were below 10. Turning to 2001, there were shifts in several households compared with the previously given time period.
First,
2-person remained at the top, and the number of people
also
increased to 34.
Then
, 1-person increased significantly in
this
time by 9 to 26 and became the second position.
Moreover
, the 3-person group in third place decreased slightly and joined closely with the 4-person at 10s.
Lastly
, 5-person and 6-person still remained at
last
, and the number dropped considerably to 6 and 2, respectively.
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