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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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 is a line graph detailing
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 the money
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spent on books from 1995 to 2005 in four
countries
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Germany
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, France, Italy and Austria.
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countries
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 saw similar changes, increasing in the latter year. The highest expenditure on books is
Germany
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 with 80
million
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dollars
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whereas
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 the lowest is Austria,
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 country still had 30
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. Looking at
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, the proportion of
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 started at 80
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, after which it experienced a fluctuation between 90
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dollars
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 and nearly 85
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dollars
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 from 1999 to 2003, before ending the period at
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 95
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dollars
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. Austria had by far the largest number of
Germany
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 with exactly 30
million
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dollars
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.
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then
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 significant rise to 40
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 and 60
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dollars
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 between 1999 and 2003,
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 at rise to 70
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dollars
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. The figure of two
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 France and Italy.
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, the amount of money in both
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 had similar changes,
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 growing to
a
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 highest point of
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countries
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 in the latter year of the decade with nearly 75
million
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dollars
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 and about 53
million
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dollars
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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