The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The
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is a line graph detailing
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the money
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spent on books from 1995 to 2005 in four
countries
Germany
, France, Italy and Austria.
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four
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countries
saw similar changes, increasing in the latter year. The highest expenditure on books is
Germany
with 80
million
US
dollars
whereas
the lowest is Austria,
this
country still had 30
million
US
dollars
. Looking at
Germany
, the proportion of
Germany
started at 80
million
US
dollars
, after which it experienced a fluctuation between 90
million
US
dollars
and nearly 85
million
US
dollars
from 1999 to 2003, before ending the period at
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95
million
US
dollars
. Austria had by far the largest number of
Germany
with exactly 30
million
US
dollars
.
This
number
then
significant rise to 40
million
US
dollars
and 60
million
US
dollars
between 1999 and 2003,
final
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at rise to 70
million
US
dollars
. The figure of two
countries
France and Italy.
Conversely
, the amount of money in both
countries
had similar changes,
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growing to
a
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highest point of
two
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countries
in the latter year of the decade with nearly 75
million
US
dollars
and about 53
million
US
dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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