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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that working for three or
four
days
instead
 of
five
 or six
days
 per week is found more beneficial by employees.
This
 essay will discuss both of these working styles. From the point of employees' view, a week consists of seven
days
 and it is a lot to give at least
five
days
 for working since they left very little
time
 to spend on their leisure. Most of my colleagues argue about how two
days
 of holiday is inadequate for their personal lives. I believe that
this
 lacking of
time
 drives
people
 to be more unsocial, unmotivated and exhausted. Motivation is crucial for working effectively. Most
of
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the
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people
 procrastinate their duties to fulfil their
hours
 at work even though they would be able to complete their responsibilities in
four
days
instead
 of
five
 or six.
For instance
,
four
days
 working style is being experienced in Belgium since the epidemic,
furthermore
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 they realized that
people
 are way happier and more efficient at work because they are able to do the same job in a lesser
time
 period and keep the extra day for themselves. On the other side, it is a big change for the companies that have been working with a
five
 or six
days
 style,
thus
 some managers think that if the working
hours
 are reduced, there would not be enough
time
 for colleagues to deal with their tasks.
Besides
, company shareholders worry that if they decrease office
time
, they would be losing their available
time
 for the companies they have been working with, which is something that should not be underestimated.
Furthermore
, wages are related to working
hours
 so managers would not be eager to pay workers the same money for fewer
hours
. In conclusion, I believe that the
four
days
 of work
makes
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people
 more efficient, more motivated and happier since they would have more
time
 to spend on whatever they want, in despite of managers' anxiety about alter, availability and efficiency.
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