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The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilitiesTo what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 accept that
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 perception is somewhat justifiable, I believe that the
business
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 generates
profits
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 and they do not use public
responsibilities
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. From my perspective, I agree with
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 view and
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 essay will address the reasons for my views. There are several reasons related to making money is not dependent on public
responsibilities
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. First of all, people start a
business
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 they will be an improved reputation with their customers. If the
business
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 had had public
responsibilities
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, it would have made more money.
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, the
business
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 of the company does not nonce social
responsibilities
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 will be no sympathy and people in society ostracised.
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, the businesses give priority to growing businesses that will not be had opportunities in their jobs.
On the other hand
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, there are a host of compelling reasons why I am convinced that the
business
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 prioritizes generating
profits
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 will not be the best way to expand the
business
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. The product of
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 not only makes more
profits
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 but
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 has the effect of factory emissions and pollution. Almost the company has damage to affect environmental degradation the reason why leads to no improvement in customers.
Consequently
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, some companies can not be had prestige in the community. In conclusion, I believe that companies can put a high priority on maximising
profits
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 more than have public
responsibilities
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.

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