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Band 2.5

.Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Residence requirements are basic but important to daily life. There
exits
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 a debate that the
government
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 should take the
responsiblity
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responsibility
 to provide free
houses
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 to
people
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 who cannot bear payments for
houses
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.
On
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 the perspective of
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financial development, I disagree with the opinion.
This
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 essay will delve into both viewpoints in a comprehensive manner before my position. There is no denying that residence issues have become increasingly critical to many countries. As
people
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 suffer from the
pandimic
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pandemic
 disease, the
globa
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global
 economic impact rises rates of
unemployments
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.
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, many
people
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 cannot afford their daily
expence
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expenses
expense
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houses
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.
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, I think the
government
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 should play the role
as
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 a supporter
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 a giver. When
people
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 are able to receive
houses
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 freely, a perceived influence will occur
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rights
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the rights
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 and interests
on
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 the ones who are not qualified.
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, the financial expenditure will be raised. Meanwhile, the cost
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 other
propotions
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proportions
promotions
 might be cut down. In my point of view, it would be better
that
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 the
government
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 implements house allowance or policies for uplifting job opportunities than
offers
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offering
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 free
houses
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 directly. In conclusion, free
houses
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 may not be a clever solution
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government
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 needs to take residence problems in hands. Complete strategies are
pirotal
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pivotal
 for making
foundmental
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fundamental
found mental
 improvements ,in the
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,not to bring
negetive
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negative
 effects to
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society.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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