Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that
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is the main factor to convert
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contry
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country
to
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country
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.
While
it is a commonly held belief that rich
nations
occasionally donate
money
to poorer
nations
,
but
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it rarely
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as
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a solution for poverty, so they should help them in another
way
rather than financial aid.
This
essay will analyse
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
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with,
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improve
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the general state
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country
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,
also
there is no better
way
than gave donate to make the
nations
get up again.
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donates
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will make
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ministries
of education and health better,
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transfer the place to modern and
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.
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addition
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some
nations
are
stronge
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strong
stronger
in
budget
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the budget
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, but they have
exceptations
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expectations
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,
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because they need workers and strong governments to list the rules that
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walk on it, rather than take
money
.
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, Russia nowadays faces stress from all sides and
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noticeable became
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,
also
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has
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issue
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. Another point to consider,
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the economy
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is a main factor to solve poverty, but if the
nations
did not use their
economy
in
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way
,
such
grow up farmers and
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industries,
dontaes
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donates
donated
wont
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effect
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in
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positive
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way
. It is
also
possible to say that nation is taken care
by
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others it did not receive
money
everytime
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, it should upgrade
it self
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itself
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.
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, used it donates to request
coporations
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corporations
or companies for
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transportation,
bulding
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buildings
and
industires
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industries
. In conclusion, despite people having
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view, I tend to believe that, previously
money
solve
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issues, nowadays
money
solve billions it is the main factor to solve everything.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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