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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companie. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In the modern era, well know associations run all kinds of employment and reach the peak of success as compared to small or unestablished trade. I think advantages are more than disadvantages. On the one hand, employment opportunities are increased because of the establishment of big
companies
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. They need more well-educated
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 to run different businesses.
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 appoint less experience communities in different positions ,
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, janitorial staff, and cafeteria staff. The second benefit is eligible
people
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 get an opportunity to prove themselves through their work and share their skills with other
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, who have less experience.
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; if the
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 who works as an accountant has an issue solving problem related to Social issues, he or she can get help from the other
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 who has experience in the Social field. The third benefit is to contribute to the development of the country because we all know that
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 reflects the economy of the country. Big
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 have approached to settle down their relations with other countries.
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,
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 partnerships with other
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.
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, with the development of multi-national
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people
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 get attracted and start to ignore private businesses
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;
people
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 start buying vegetables and all household items from the grocery store rather than street vendors so the street vendors feel helpless and shut down their
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.
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, life will be harder for illustrate
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 because they do not have the basic education and resources which they require to run big
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 as compared to educated
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.
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; an educated
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 can run any kind of
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 but a
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 who has no knowledge of
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 survives in poverty. Conclusion:
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 big
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 provide better opportunities for employment
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 better future options.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local charm
  • multinational companies
  • economic benefits
  • tax revenues
  • local infrastructure
  • reduce competition
  • monopolistic behavior
  • standardization
  • reliable
  • rural or underserved areas
  • economic disparities
  • foster innovation
  • research and development
  • advancements
  • consumers
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