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Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion

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To succeed in life the need for hard
work
 and
determination
 is undeniable. Of course
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the definition of
success
 there is substantial improvement of one’s professional, financial, intellectual, or spiritual status. Often it appears that there had been other catalysts for
success
, like opportunity and guidance. But my belief is that, with enough perseverance and diligence all variables in the way of becoming successful may be neutralized. A person, in education, career or soul searching, faces many hurdles, some barely discomforting and others disarming.
That is
 surely beyond argument.
Hence
 there should not be disagreements in saying, hurdles are called
such
 because they require us to put in more effort than usual. The greater the hurdle is, the more effort we must put in. Drawing from
this
,
success
 and the hard
work
 –
determination
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work-determination
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 factor are positively related to each other. It is as irrefutable as mathematics. A contradictory point of view may project that the formulaic relationship between hard
work
 –
determination
 and achievement may be engineered by the opportunity and/or guidance one might get.
That is
 reasonably agreeable. But
such
 secondary factors can never become the primary.
For example
, it is commonly said that George W.
Bush
, the Senior, has been far more prolific, than his son is, in his military, bureaucratic, and political career,
while
 it is evident that he had to diligently
work
 his way up the ladder, from being a soldier to the fabled US White House. Mr.
Bush
 Junior,
on the other hand
, had most of his way to the
oval office
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Oval Office
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 already paved by the grace of his patron.
Then
 it may be said that
Bush
 Sr. worked harder than
Bush
 Jr. did, and we all are spectators of their discriminated rapport, as humans and as leaders.
Therefore
, I conclude here that, though some secondary factors sometimes may influence the dynamics of
success
, achievement of it solely depends on hard
work
 and
determination
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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