Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

Some people put forth the argument that
students
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the lessons in school. In
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this
problem and propose some possible solutions. First of all, modern technologies must be
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for the distraction of
students
. With a small handset,
students
can listen to music, play video
games
or read
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without
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notice from the teachers.
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indicate
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that
students
, including the studious one, find it difficult to not look at the screen to check the notice from social media.
In addition
, the traditional way of teaching might be too boring. Several
students
feel bored and exhausted when they just listen to the teacher and note
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the notebook, so it is easy for them to
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their concentration.
For instance
, I,
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students
, usually see my friends play video
games
or sleep in the class after fifteen minutes because they
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bored.
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gadgets and boring way of teaching will lead to the disconcentration of
students
. Fortunately, there are
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of solutions
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be applied to solve
this
issue.
Firstly
,
students
should mute their personal phones before the class, so they are not distracted by the noise.
Moreover
, they can shut
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phones down, so they do not play
games
and focus on the
lesson
.
Secondly
,
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should change their teaching way. They should interact with
students
rather than just read from
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powerpoint
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PowerPoint
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lesson
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they prepare funny
games
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with the
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Hence
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down phones and
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the
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more interesting can solve the problem. In conclusion,
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smartphones and boring
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curricula
cause distraction
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students
.
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by
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images and
games
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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