Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Some people put forth the argument that
students
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are difficult to focus
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the lessons in school. In
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this
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problem and propose some possible solutions. First of all, modern technologies must be
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condemned
for the distraction of
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. With a small handset,
students
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can listen to music, play video
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or read
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without
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notice from the teachers.
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indicate
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that
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, including the studious one, find it difficult to not look at the screen to check the notice from social media.
In addition
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, the traditional way of teaching might be too boring. Several
students
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feel bored and exhausted when they just listen to the teacher and note
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the notebook, so it is easy for them to
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their concentration.
For instance
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, I,
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highschool students
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highschool
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students
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, usually see my friends play video
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or sleep in the class after fifteen minutes because they
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feel
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bored.
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, the
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gadgets and boring way of teaching will lead to the disconcentration of
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. Fortunately, there are
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of solutions
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be applied to solve
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issue.
Firstly
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,
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should mute their personal phones before the class, so they are not distracted by the noise.
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, they can shut
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phones down, so they do not play
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and focus on the
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.
Secondly
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,
teacher
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the teacher
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should change their teaching way. They should interact with
students
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rather than just read from
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books
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. To demonstrate, my teacher at school usually
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powerpoint
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PowerPoint
to add more images for the
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they prepare funny
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which are
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with the
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Hence
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,
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down phones and
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the
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curriculum
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more interesting can solve the problem. In conclusion,
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smartphones and boring
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curricula
cause distraction
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students
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However
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,
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can
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by
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the
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livelier
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images and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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