The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009.

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, It is evident that

whereas

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the community

schools

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experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others saw a corresponding decline.

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, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled

schools

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fell from just over half to only 20% or one-fifth from 2000 to 2009.

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, the relative number of children in grammar

schools

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- just under one quarter - dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist

schools

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, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending

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type of school (12%)

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fell,

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not significantly. Despite the other three types of

schools

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declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community

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. In fact,

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only a small minority of 12% were educated in these

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in 2000,

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figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?

Many people use distance-leanring programmes (study material post, TV, internet, etc) to study at home, but some people think that it can not bring the same benefit of attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Some people think all lawbreakers should be sent to prison, while others think there are better alternatives for those whose crimes are minor, such as making them do work for the local community. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should bot be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments should support care vs fiannce for retired people while others believe that they should save money when they get older. Discuss both views and give your opinion?